I am a Year 5 student at Papakura Central School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Kahikatea hub and my teacher is Whaea Sharlee and Whaea Tamzin. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Kia ora Ngarea! The name of your mini beast is very catchy, Lizardo sounds like he is a cool character who does love an adventure. You continue to use more describing words when setting the scene, e.g. "white silky thread". The problems you created for your beast to work through were exciting and using te reo names within your writing was lovely to see. The only feedback I have would be to grow the solution part a little more, think about how we discussed our Percy Jackson story and how the author added more information after the main event to keep the reader engaged. You maths is nearly correct, maybe look back at our Number Talk slides to refresh. Thanks Ngarea!
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Kia ora Ngarea! The name of your mini beast is very catchy, Lizardo sounds like he is a cool character who does love an adventure. You continue to use more describing words when setting the scene, e.g. "white silky thread". The problems you created for your beast to work through were exciting and using te reo names within your writing was lovely to see. The only feedback I have would be to grow the solution part a little more, think about how we discussed our Percy Jackson story and how the author added more information after the main event to keep the reader engaged. You maths is nearly correct, maybe look back at our Number Talk slides to refresh. Thanks Ngarea!
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